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  Geronimo and his friend took the ruby to azul, he had the sapphire so they could stick together and the peace would come. Geronimo went home and he was happy to see his family again. You'll get paid for what you have dene. It you did something bad, it will return to you, or if you did good, nice things, it will return to you. So I thought we need to be careful not to do bad things, or it could return all to you.
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Geronimo and his friend took the ruby to Azul, he had the sapphire so they could stick together and peace would happen. Geronimo went home and he was happy to see his family again. You'll get paid for what you have done. It you did something bad, it will return to you, or if you did good, nice things, it will return to you. So I thought we need to be careful not to do bad things, or it would all return to us.  


 "Don't do unto others what you don't want done unto you".

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